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11) What about other cavers? Will the individual child’s parents be on the trip? If so, will the child’s parent be in the cave with the child? Will the child in question be significantly younger than other members of the group? Are there pre-existing hostilities between your individual child and others going on the trip?
Cheryl Jones wrote:However I don't get this one11) What about other cavers? Will the individual child’s parents be on the trip? If so, will the child’s parent be in the cave with the child? Will the child in question be significantly younger than other members of the group? Are there pre-existing hostilities between your individual child and others going on the trip?
I don't understand why there is a "child in question," or who s/he is. Also, who is the "individual child" in the second sentence? Evidently not the same "individual child" in the other numbered items, so this makes it confusing.
Cheryl
Will the individual child’s parents be in the cave also?
Plethodon wrote:Not speak good english, but confusing read this first post. Much less confusing if take out word 'individual' everywhere. All childs unique, but cannot devide child. Maybe leave in first time to make point, but gone after that.
Cheryl Jones wrote:Better, but I'm still confused. I don't know who "the" individual child is in the second sentence.Will the individual child’s parents be in the cave also?
The document is speaking to parents and refers to "your" child. Now we suddenly have a "the" child. Who is this kid, and what is his significance?
What are you really asking -- whether the parents of other children on the trip will be in the cave as well? Are you asking if the parents reading the document will be going with their child? (What are the answers you're looking for? Usually a good way to come up with a question to match!
Cheryl Jones wrote: [Maybe we can help.)
lookingaround wrote:You are right. It is still confusing...
We are trying to ask if there are hostilities (or bullying) between the child who is caving and other cavers on the trip. If so, having the caving child's parent/guardian along might make it easier on the caver.
kvart wrote:Plethodon wrote:Not speak good english, but confusing read this first post. Much less confusing if take out word 'individual' everywhere. All childs unique, but cannot devide child. Maybe leave in first time to make point, but gone after that.
I agree with Plethodon. Having the word individual appear over and over is redundant and makes it hard to read. Consider changing the statement
"The appropriate minimum age depends upon many factors. Parents/Guardians should consider the following questions: " to
"Since each child is unique, t heappropriate minimum age depends upon many factors. Parents/Guardians should consider the following questions about their individual child:"
Then get rid of the rest of the "individuals"
Patricia Bingham wrote:I see you have addressed this to parents and guardians. Could this somehow be written to include youth group leaders?
I think perhaps the wording in #2 from "don't lie" to something positive, like "give accurate information" might look better. I find folks respond to positives (not "positively don't lie"!) better than negatives.
#1; Change "should" to "must". So many adult leaders have told me, "Well, "should" means I can decide to follow this or not and whatever I do is ok". Same with "guidlelines" vs regulations for some reason. Go figure.
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